How can I improve my online writing skills? Please look at my short poem about being a women. Thank you.?
Yes this is serious. I get all A’s in my college level courses and after this class I will never need another English class AGAIN! My major is Engineering and I talked to three and the head of the Engineering department and they all said I am fine, math is the main focus.
Online wise I make so many mistakes, someone said because I type to fast….anyway I want to improve it online…please help. -Auggie
Being a women
By August J. A.
Being a women brings me such joy. I am a women of looks and strength, I take pride with body, my soul, and my outlook on life.
My feet carry me well for work and school, my eyes see the beauty that some may miss. My long hair blows with excitement and glee…yes I am that women that you see. My small curves, my large eyes, my cute feet and my sexy small body speaks for all women of the world. Yes thats me. I am like any other women who enjoys the labor of work and clean, who is stress free when jogging, who enjoys pleasing her man..her love, the leader. Yes thats me I speak for every women.
Ok I thats a little of it. What do you think??
ITS A POEM CLASS!! I don't need it but took it for fun!! Just look at my English skills…my God…you people :/
I forgot who i'm dealing with..poem class………I took it for fun…its a non credit. You know like a knitting class?? And for my English class I finished my 10 page essay!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Thanks, but I am speaking froma creative mind…if my hair had feelings. But thank you for the only one to answer me.
Sips green tea…
Thanks : )
And no I am not Kris….he is too smart!! But nope i'm Auggie : )
You could improve your online writing skills by reading some poetry. I’m not being smart about this, but what you have written here is prose, not poetry.
Poetry has rhythm and meter, it uses words to express a dimension beyond words, not create a shopping list of attributes.
The one line I like, “my long hair blows with excitement and glee’ is made trite by the use of an old fashioned and unlikely word “glee”, which appears to have been added simply to rhyme with a word in the next line. That might not be right, but it’s what it looks like and it reduces the impact of your poem.
Talk to your tutor about how to structure your poem more successfully, or you could try exercises like haiku, where the idea is to be very strict in using language to create a formally structured poem.
It’s very good practice.
Oh yeah, btw ~ I used to think you are Kris W, but I’m more inclined now to think you’re Trevor/Priscilla. It’s the use of language.
Cheers
